All the revisions I have done for my classmate’s papers have helped me improved my writing style. Usually every assignment that I get has specific instructions and I would evaluate the paper by using the sheet called “AFOSP Strategies for Peer-Editing a Paper.” I often looked at this strategy for guidance, because it helped me improve my revision process and how I can give my classmates better feedback for their papers. For example, I would read along the questions from the AFOSP and I would suggest detail information to improve their paper and how it can be done. It would be best that I would focus on the topic or assignment and to decide whether the paper has a good thesis or purpose. Revision is very helpful, because I have learned different strategies in writing and I also get feedback from my peers when they look at my papers. I realize that some of the mistakes that they made were also on my paper, so I fix these mistakes on my papers.
AFOSP introduces oragainzation on how the paper should have an introduction, body, and conclusion. I learned many ways to indicate a good introduction and how the body paragraphs should be settled in their papers. Specifically, I would focus more on their topic and explain that their paragraphs need to have a transition and how it flows into their topic. One problem that I always recognize in a person’s paper is repetition, because people love using the same words over and over again. Sometimes ideas are repeated and I clearly state in their papers that other words should be suggested instead of using the same word like twenty times.
Support and proofreading are also on the AFOSP; this helps me by reading the questions and how I can relate it to the paper that I am revising. Another example could be the sources that they use in their paper and how it can be properly cited. Sources should be relevant to the paper, however, quotes and paraphrasing ideas should have citations. I often check grammatical and spelling errors, and it happens to everyone, but I like to spell words correctly so that the paper is properly free of errors. When I revise papers, I always think of AFOSP, because it is a great strategy that helped improve my revision process and it changed my writing style when I write a paper. I thank Deome for creating this guide and I will use it for sure in my up coming papers throughout my college career.
Monday, April 19, 2010
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Monday, April 5, 2010
Group Essay: Tim Wise Interview
Racism is defined by means of criticizing an ethnic group. This term can also be defined as a race being more superior to any other ethnic group. I have dealt with racism in my life and it turns out be racial slurs that are said to one another. Privilege can be granted to an individual by means of gratitude, but with the term racism, the word seems to be brought up in a different meaning. Race is constructed differently among many other people, however people may be born differently, but there are no genetic markers in defining race. In America, race can be defined by a person’s nationality and I define privilege as a special right; an advantage to a person. According to Cook, “[The] justice department data tells us that black and Latino males are two to three times more likely to be stopped by police and searched for drugs, even though white men are up to four times more likely to have drugs on them” (6). So therefore, racism is being applied to the Latino and black males by means of discrimination. I have been discriminated in my life by the color of my skin and it can be very hard not to say anything back. Much of my work for paper three has concluded the ethics of eating and how it is affects among race. I have read many articles about Barack Obama and how he is not a good president. People judge him by the color of his skin and I find it to be racist when a picture of Barack Obama is being portrayed as a donkey in a food stamp with black stereotypes such as chicken, ribs, kool-aid, and watermelon. The information that I explained above ties into a lot of my information in paper three and how people view race in the ethics of eating.
When asking a group of people for their own meaning of racism one can receive various responses. The same can be said of privilege, this is so because of people’s differences. In the way that someone is raised and their background will affect how they treat and react to others. After reading an interview with Tim Wise (by the color of their skin: Tim Wise in the Myth of a Postracial America) one can apply their definition to their way of life. When defining racism a judgment against a race biased on a pre conceived idea. This is dangerous because people will treat differences the only way they have learned how, giving some privilege over others. Racism and privilege go hand and hand, for example: “We also know that job applicants with “white-sounding” names are 50 percent more likely to get called back than those with “black-sounding” names, even if both have the same qualifications.” (Page 6) Tim Wise’s words show that just because a person has a name that sounds different they will not be considered in a serious role. That is a fault of most people, coming up with a result before trying to solve the question. Over time the definition of racism and privilege has changed and can be seen in American culture and life today.
Racism is a word that evokes powerful feelings. This is true especially in America, where racism has a long, and rather dismal history. According to Tim Wise, racism and privilege are directly related. In American society today, this correlation is apparent even amongst the nation’s most prestigious leaders. As Wise states, “Privilege also takes the form of less pressure to perform” (page 5). He further explains this statement by asking if Obama, our nation’s first black president, happened to make the same grammar mistakes in his speeches as previous president Bush did, would he be considered less qualified for the job? This is a question many Americans should ask themselves. Wise also proclaims that “we can make peace with the past by recognizing that good people can still do great evil…once we come to realize that, we become a lot less smug about our own goodness and more aware of the evil we participate in every day” (page 9). I find this applies to my own life, as even I find myself guilty of falling for racial stereotypes.
Tim wise often talks about “white privilege”, which are different institutions and programs that give additional resources to whites that may not be accessible to other races. Wise also states, “Privilege also takes the form of less pressure to perform (Page 5).” This privilege may be present in more diverse communities, for example larger cities. But in the smaller less diverse towns there may be more of a chance for equal opportunity. White privilege is a form of inequality that is hard to regulate. It takes the whole communities cooperation to change for fully equal opportunities. Just like it will take our whole communities to change what kind of food we get to eat, if we want all organic or non-GMO, it’ll take the whole community to unite and change.
Works Cited
Cook, David. "By The Color of Their Skin: Tim Wise on The Myth of a Postracial America." The Sun July &
Aug. 2009: 4-12. Print.
Barack Obama Racial Picture http://www.boston.com/bostonglobe/editorial_opinion/outofline/racist16_400.jpg
When asking a group of people for their own meaning of racism one can receive various responses. The same can be said of privilege, this is so because of people’s differences. In the way that someone is raised and their background will affect how they treat and react to others. After reading an interview with Tim Wise (by the color of their skin: Tim Wise in the Myth of a Postracial America) one can apply their definition to their way of life. When defining racism a judgment against a race biased on a pre conceived idea. This is dangerous because people will treat differences the only way they have learned how, giving some privilege over others. Racism and privilege go hand and hand, for example: “We also know that job applicants with “white-sounding” names are 50 percent more likely to get called back than those with “black-sounding” names, even if both have the same qualifications.” (Page 6) Tim Wise’s words show that just because a person has a name that sounds different they will not be considered in a serious role. That is a fault of most people, coming up with a result before trying to solve the question. Over time the definition of racism and privilege has changed and can be seen in American culture and life today.
Racism is a word that evokes powerful feelings. This is true especially in America, where racism has a long, and rather dismal history. According to Tim Wise, racism and privilege are directly related. In American society today, this correlation is apparent even amongst the nation’s most prestigious leaders. As Wise states, “Privilege also takes the form of less pressure to perform” (page 5). He further explains this statement by asking if Obama, our nation’s first black president, happened to make the same grammar mistakes in his speeches as previous president Bush did, would he be considered less qualified for the job? This is a question many Americans should ask themselves. Wise also proclaims that “we can make peace with the past by recognizing that good people can still do great evil…once we come to realize that, we become a lot less smug about our own goodness and more aware of the evil we participate in every day” (page 9). I find this applies to my own life, as even I find myself guilty of falling for racial stereotypes.
Tim wise often talks about “white privilege”, which are different institutions and programs that give additional resources to whites that may not be accessible to other races. Wise also states, “Privilege also takes the form of less pressure to perform (Page 5).” This privilege may be present in more diverse communities, for example larger cities. But in the smaller less diverse towns there may be more of a chance for equal opportunity. White privilege is a form of inequality that is hard to regulate. It takes the whole communities cooperation to change for fully equal opportunities. Just like it will take our whole communities to change what kind of food we get to eat, if we want all organic or non-GMO, it’ll take the whole community to unite and change.
Works Cited
Cook, David. "By The Color of Their Skin: Tim Wise on The Myth of a Postracial America." The Sun July &
Aug. 2009: 4-12. Print.
Barack Obama Racial Picture http://www.boston.com/bostonglobe/editorial_opinion/outofline/racist16_400.jpg
Tuesday, March 30, 2010
How do you choose which sources you use in your papers for Engl 101?
I find my sources on the internet by doing the scholarly research that I get recommended from my professors. The articles or journals that I obtained are specifically for my paper and doing the research can take up a lot of time. Usually websites with an edu at the end would be considered as a scholarly website. Going to the library and finding a book is very easy, because you can always find help there if needed. When I get assigned to write a paper for English 101, the requirements are different for each paper. For an example, specific instructions and details will be indicated that I need to find a scholarly journal or article pertaining to food. However, you cannot always trust the internet to give you accurate information. That is why professors always bold these important notices because they want to warn you about the information you read on the internet and how it can mislead you to write a false paper.
I find my sources using the Washington State Library on the internet by accessing “JSTOR” and finding my articles or journals on their search engines. Professors will state that many search engines on the library website are pertained to scholarly journals and articles. I may look at five or more articles to see which one desires more of my understanding. When I decide to pick which articles or journals to use for my paper, I choose the best ones with the information pertaining to the requirements of my paper and how it can be very useful when I can quote ideas and paraphrase information to my acknowledge. I can use the information to begin my introduction, body paragraphs, and my conclusion.
There are many methods when researching and I found my method to be very helpful when I search on scholarly websites that end with org or edu. I could perhaps talk to a professor and ask what other types of methods can be helpful for me to search for proper sources. I do recommend that “JSTOR” is really useful when searching for articles or journals. If you do not have any connection to the internet, then go to the library and search for articles and journals there. Researching has been so easy for me and I thank the person who invented the internet.
I find my sources using the Washington State Library on the internet by accessing “JSTOR” and finding my articles or journals on their search engines. Professors will state that many search engines on the library website are pertained to scholarly journals and articles. I may look at five or more articles to see which one desires more of my understanding. When I decide to pick which articles or journals to use for my paper, I choose the best ones with the information pertaining to the requirements of my paper and how it can be very useful when I can quote ideas and paraphrase information to my acknowledge. I can use the information to begin my introduction, body paragraphs, and my conclusion.
There are many methods when researching and I found my method to be very helpful when I search on scholarly websites that end with org or edu. I could perhaps talk to a professor and ask what other types of methods can be helpful for me to search for proper sources. I do recommend that “JSTOR” is really useful when searching for articles or journals. If you do not have any connection to the internet, then go to the library and search for articles and journals there. Researching has been so easy for me and I thank the person who invented the internet.
Monday, March 8, 2010
Norman E. Borlaug Article & Source/ Article for Paper 3 (Blog Response’s)
For the improvement of food crops Norman E. Borlaug states that technology and biotechnology are needed for the 8.3 billion people on this Earth. It’s true, technology today has helped us improve our agricultural system by being efficient from the benefits that we get from biotechnology. This will improve the food and fiber in the world we live in today (Borlaug, 487). Transgenic crops have been of the most rapid cases of technology diffusion in the history of agricultural (Borlaug, 487). So what can we expect from Biotechnology? Well it has greatly impacted medicine and public health. Technology today is helping starving people all over the world with these modified crops. Genetic engineering has improved the nutritional quality of our food crops and scientists are beginning to research furthermore in finding genes to transfer to other sorts of crops.
Many people may not realize the situation, because of these so called “antibiotechnology zealots” continue to wage their campaigns of propaganda and vandalism (Borlaug, 488). Without these technological advances, the world would be different. The positive impact of this in transferring genes into rice has increased the quantities of vitamin A, iron, and other micronutrients (Borlaug, 488). People all over the world that lack vitamin A and iron will no longer continue to suffer the causes of blindness and anemia. In the U.S. “genetically modified foods” are judged to be safe by the Department of Agriculture and the Food and Drug Administration. I trust the government and how they establish their regulatory frameworks to guide testing and the use of genetically modified crops.
Biotechnology research has cost an enormous amount of money over the past few years, but scientists have benefited from these new technological breakthroughs and have helped billions of starving people. Those that are not in favor of biotechnology in the processing of crops and food need to realize that it is the benefit of feeding the human race. Technology is available for us to use and research in any ways to help the world. I believe that if we continue the well advanced researched that were doing, it will lead to a bigger accomplishment in establishing a world that no longer needs to fear famine.
Many people may not realize the situation, because of these so called “antibiotechnology zealots” continue to wage their campaigns of propaganda and vandalism (Borlaug, 488). Without these technological advances, the world would be different. The positive impact of this in transferring genes into rice has increased the quantities of vitamin A, iron, and other micronutrients (Borlaug, 488). People all over the world that lack vitamin A and iron will no longer continue to suffer the causes of blindness and anemia. In the U.S. “genetically modified foods” are judged to be safe by the Department of Agriculture and the Food and Drug Administration. I trust the government and how they establish their regulatory frameworks to guide testing and the use of genetically modified crops.
Biotechnology research has cost an enormous amount of money over the past few years, but scientists have benefited from these new technological breakthroughs and have helped billions of starving people. Those that are not in favor of biotechnology in the processing of crops and food need to realize that it is the benefit of feeding the human race. Technology is available for us to use and research in any ways to help the world. I believe that if we continue the well advanced researched that were doing, it will lead to a bigger accomplishment in establishing a world that no longer needs to fear famine.
Monday, March 1, 2010
The Omnivore’s Dilemma Has Come To An End
The Omnivore’s Dilemma has come to an end. The readings have provided me so much information to my knowledge about food in general, but chapter 20 “The Perfect Meal” came to the conclusion in how Pollan viewed food. For many generations eating has been involved with a cultural family and that there was no need to rehearse a meal (411). Pollan says that the way we eat is not the way to eat every day. Two questions had come into mind, “What am I eating and where does it come from?” Why doesn’t the industry want us to know the types of food that were eating? The Omnivore’s Dilemma had greatly impacted my judgment upon many foods that I eat. However, food is food and some people believe that what ever they’re eating is probably healthy and in some cases it might be or not. It is impossible to prepare and eat a meal quite so physically, intellectually and emotionally costly with thinking about the incalculably larger debts we incur when we eat industrially (410)… Pollan has put the context into a more perspective saying; “We eat by the grace of nature, not industry, and what we’re eating is never anything more or less than the body of the world” (411)…
As you may have noticed when you buy fruit, it is very expensive. A burger can cost a dollar at McDonald’s, but fruit can cost more than 4 dollars. Why is that? Pollan had concluded that much of this reason was because of the industry and how it is run by these big corporations. I believe in no perfect meal, but Pollan on the other hand had a vision of a perfect society with the perfect meal. Producing our own food is a practical solution to any of our culture’s dilemmas surrounding eating and agriculture (392). No longer am I going to believe the industry and their food, but I will begin to eat more local and organic food that satisfies me. Thanks for ruining my appetite Michael Pollan.
As you may have noticed when you buy fruit, it is very expensive. A burger can cost a dollar at McDonald’s, but fruit can cost more than 4 dollars. Why is that? Pollan had concluded that much of this reason was because of the industry and how it is run by these big corporations. I believe in no perfect meal, but Pollan on the other hand had a vision of a perfect society with the perfect meal. Producing our own food is a practical solution to any of our culture’s dilemmas surrounding eating and agriculture (392). No longer am I going to believe the industry and their food, but I will begin to eat more local and organic food that satisfies me. Thanks for ruining my appetite Michael Pollan.
Monday, February 22, 2010
Response to the Readings #5
Chapter sixteen of the Omnivore’s Dilemma had dealt with the 2 different evolutionary strategies for dealing with the question of food selection. So the foods we choose can impact our lives and that is why I choose to eat healthy. Our sense of taste is the first tool to detect the kind’s foods we like and dislike (291). Michael Pollan did an excellent job in describing the positive and negative views of food selection. There are many people, including myself that are picky eaters. However, the word “disgust” would turn out to be another valuable tool that deals with the omnivore’s dilemma. Much of our food is relied on culture, because people from different countries eat a variety of foods. For an example, in America people love eating cheeseburgers and fries, but in Mexico most people love to eat carne asada.
Humans find it difficult to choose the types of food that are essential for their healthy diet. So Pollan had concluded that “we rely on expert opinion, advertising, government food pyramids, and diet books, and we place our faith in science to sort out for us what culture once did with rather more success” (303). He is correct about this statement, because I do rely on experts to tell me what types of foods are healthy for me to eat. We are able to consume anything that our mind desires and much of this reason is because of personal habits. The food that humans eat can be the downfall of their health and people choose to make these decisions because it’s what they like to eat.
Humans find it difficult to choose the types of food that are essential for their healthy diet. So Pollan had concluded that “we rely on expert opinion, advertising, government food pyramids, and diet books, and we place our faith in science to sort out for us what culture once did with rather more success” (303). He is correct about this statement, because I do rely on experts to tell me what types of foods are healthy for me to eat. We are able to consume anything that our mind desires and much of this reason is because of personal habits. The food that humans eat can be the downfall of their health and people choose to make these decisions because it’s what they like to eat.
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